Worked example 1 — the argument, modeled (to the principal).
Introduction with thesis: Every lunch period, the trash cans in our cafeteria fill with apple cores, orange peels and carrot ends. Our school should start a compost program for fruit and vegetable scraps this spring.
Reason 1 with relevant evidence and a clarifying transition: First, a large share of our cafeteria waste could be composted. In a five-day food-waste audit, the green team weighed 100 pounds of scraps, and 60 pounds were fruit and vegetable scraps, which the county extension fact sheet lists as ideal "greens."
Reason 2 with domain-specific vocabulary: In addition, compost would feed the school garden. As microorganisms decompose organic material, it becomes a dark, crumbly soil amendment that the garden club would otherwise have to buy.
Acknowledging a concern, with a clause that clarifies the relationship: Even though some people worry that compost smells, the extension fact sheet explains that a balanced bin with enough air and dry "browns" should not smell bad, and it advises keeping meat and dairy out. Because our plan includes only fruit and vegetable scraps, the 15 pounds of bread and grains and the 25 pounds of meat and dairy would still go to the trash.
Conclusion that follows: Since most of our scraps can be composted, and the compost would help our own garden, I ask that the green team be allowed to run a spring trial with two bins.
What makes it work: the thesis is in the introduction; each reason has relevant evidence; first, in addition, even though and because show relationships; decompose, microorganisms and organic material are used precisely; the language is formal for a principal; only the credible sources are used; the conclusion follows from the reasons.
Worked example 2 — the informative piece, modeled (for fifth-graders).
How Food Scraps Become Compost (heading). Have you ever wondered what happens to an apple core in a compost bin? Composting turns food scraps into compost, a rich material for soil, when four ingredients are kept in balance. (thesis in the introduction)
What is compost? (description; definition) Compost is organic material, anything that was once alive, that has decomposed, or broken down, into a dark, crumbly material that gardeners mix into soil.
The four ingredients (compare/contrast) Greens, like peels and cores, are wet and full of nitrogen. In contrast, browns, like dry leaves and shredded paper, are dry and full of carbon. Compost also needs water and air. As the county extension fact sheet puts it, the pile should feel "like a wrung-out sponge." (quotation)
How to build a bin (chronology/sequence, as a numbered list) 1. Start with a layer of browns. 2. Add greens. 3. Cover them with more browns. 4. Turn the pile every week or two.
What goes wrong (cause/effect) If the pile is too wet or gets no air, it can start to smell. The solution is to add browns and turn it (problem/solution).
Graphic: a pie chart of the audit (60 pounds fruit and vegetables, 15 pounds bread and grains, 25 pounds meat and dairy) with a caption explaining that only the fruit and vegetable part goes in the school bin.
Conclusion that follows: With the right balance of greens, browns, water and air, tiny living things can turn yesterday's lunch into compost for next spring's garden.
What makes it work: the topic is developed with relevant information of every kind the standard names: a definition (compost is organic material that has decomposed into a dark, crumbly material), facts (greens are full of nitrogen; browns are full of carbon), concrete details a fifth-grader can picture (apple cores, peels, dry leaves, shredded paper) and a quotation whose wording matters ("like a wrung-out sponge"). Each is relevant because it helps the reader understand how scraps become compost, the topic the thesis presents; a fact about the history of composting would be true but would not develop this topic. Transitions clarify how the ideas and concepts relate: in contrast marks the difference between greens and browns, also adds water and air as further ingredients, if links a condition (too wet, no air) to its effect (a smell), and the numbered steps show sequence.
Worked example 3 — revising for audience and precision. Draft for the principal: "Kids waste tons of food and composting is awesome." Revision: "Students throw away about 20 pounds of food scraps a day, and 60% of what the green team weighed could be composted." Tons was imprecise and wrong (100 pounds is not tons), kids and awesome were too casual for the audience, and the revision uses the audit's numbers.
Worked example 4 — judging a source. Should the argument quote the company page's "soil in 24 hours"? No. The page is written to sell a product, it does not explain how it got the number, and the extension fact sheet, written by a named educator, says finished compost takes weeks to months. A credible source is chosen for the claim it supports, and this claim is not supported.